Tuesday 22 March 2011

connors-homework

The small elephant was beneath the warm rocks hiding away from the sizzling hot sun.The elephant explodes water out of his long trunk cooling down the elephant. He could sense the taste of water pouring down his ear. The refreshing water is splosh splashing over him.It tickles him and feels nice,he looks like he is laughing.He is snorting the water through his trunk in joy.The water was ruffly going down his throat as if he was having a steaming hot shower.It looks like he is enjoying it because he has got a very happy face on him.He is sitting on the soggy sand coloured floor peacefully and very relaxed . It looks like he is all alone but he is not lonely. This looks like it is the elephants perfect place to be.The elephant is big and powerful but looks quite small and gentle.I suggest this is the perfect way for a hot heavy elephant to spend the day.

4 comments:

  1. THIS IS FAB Connor. There are so may bits of it that I like - hot, heavy elephant / all alone but not lonely.
    Thank you so much for writing for the 100WC!

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  2. A wonderful descriptive piece of writing Connor! It does sound like a perfect place :) Next time you write a description, have a go at writing it in past tense.

    Keep blogging!

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  3. Great imaginative writing, Connor. Most impressive; well done!

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