Thursday 24 March 2011

Annabel 100wc

Suddenly...It started to rain. All the animals went back home but one. It was a tiny elephant who was lost and did not know where to go. It had once been in a zoo and was tormented so it ran away. One day in the zoo there was a parade and the elephant was in it and that is how it ran away. Everybody knew what was going to happen because they could see by all of the signs that he was making. But now it has stopped raining and the elephant was playing under a waterfall.
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  1. Mrs Irvin24 March 2011 at 17:34

    I really like your opening Annabel. Sometimes it is important to add background information, however, in this 100 words I would have liked to know what happened to the poor little elephant when he was lost and under the waterfall. You write beautiful descriptions so make sure you let everyone see that next time :)

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  2. jfb5724 March 2011 at 20:15

    Thank you for linking to the 100WC this week Annabel. Like Mrs Irvin I really like the way you have presented the start of this piece.

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  3. Annabel1 April 2011 at 09:55

    Thank you for commenting on my work I really appreciate it!

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